Tuesday, May 10, 2016

Seniors: "This I Believe" & "The Moth"

For this final unit, you will compose a "This I Believe" statement and deliver a "Moth" story.

Before you develop your own “This I Believe” statement, peruse and listen to existing testimonials here. Use the “explore” tab to search for 5 intriguing statements. For each statement, note the following:



1. author/speaker

2. crux or “thesis” of statement

3. 3 observations regarding style, delivery, structure, or other storytelling elements

4. your attitude in relation to the speaker’s

Once you have completed this step, begin constructing and refining your own statement.



Visit “The Moth” site. Select and listen to 3 stories. For each story, note the following:

1. speaker and title

2. theme of the story

3. 3 observations regarding style, delivery, structure, or other storytelling elements

4. your attitude in relation to the speaker’s story

5. a score (based on our rubric)

Then, click here to learn some storytelling tips. Once you have completed this step, begin constructing and refining your own story.

21 comments:

kgallahue journalism blog said...
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John Weeks said...

1. James Foster... Taken For A Ride
2. car being stolen
3. He had a unique style making his story funny when something that happened to him wasn't funny to him. He did a good job of structuring his story. He was humerous to help his story.
4. I thought it was really funny.
5. A

Ryan brown said...

1. speaker and title
The huanted freezer by Geogre Dawes Green
2. theme of the story
Live in the moment because nothing last forever
3. 3 observations regarding style, delivery, structure, or other storytelling elements
I liked his style he was talking in a sarcastic tone and changed his voice depending on who was speaking the story, very into his story, made the listener feel like they were there.
4. your attitude in relation to the speaker’s story
i thought it was funny
5. a score (based on our rubric)
12

colin mello said...

Colin Mello
1. author/speaker
A.elivia bautista
B.John McCain
C Sarah Adams
D. Jim Snitker
2. crux or “thesis” of statement
A. gang violence is not worth it.
B. Never give up faith and hope
C.Be kind to everyone
D. You dont have to be a combat veteran to be a hero
3. 3 observations regarding style, delivery, structure, or other storytelling elements
A. she seems innocent, like she doesn't fully understand why her brother was killed and confused why it happened to her family
B. He seems grateful to be alive, and he accepts his mistakes and is willing to overcome them
C. She doesn't understand why everyone thinks that they are the most important person on the earth.
D.He feels like an outcast since he wasn't in Vietnam, He can't tell his story because he doesnt feel man enough.
4. your attitude in relation to the speaker’s
A. I found the story heart braking.
B. I feel that if you have perseverance you can survive anything
C. I feel that everyone should take everyone else's opinions into account when going through day to day life.
D. I sympathize with him because he feels inadequate because he wasn't deployed to a combat zone

shane boria said...

author/speaker
silas house
crux or “thesis” of statement
if we were all like dogs, we would be all happier.
3 observations regarding style, delivery, structure, or other storytelling elements
he loves and respects his dogs, he tells his story like a documentary, and he uses literary terms in his story about asas dog.
your attitude in relation to the speaker’s
my attitude to this author is interesting, he truly loves his dogs and believes that it is the closest to God.


http://thisibelieve.org/essay/28061/ - love on four feet
author/speaker
sarah culp searles
crux or “thesis” of statement
“i believe love is steadfast”
3 observations regarding style, delivery, structure, or other storytelling elements
she learned to love a cat that she didn’t actually want, one of their cats was almost dying and she learned after a rough day she got a warm kitty snuggle, and she was emotional while speaking and believes that love is unconditional and cannot be changed.
your attitude in relation to the speaker’s
I sooned loves to love a cat she didn’t want because she opened her eyes and saw that this cat needed someone to truly love it.



1. author/speaker
temple grandin
2. crux or “thesis” of statement
“because i have autism i live by concrete rules and learns by the google search engine of google images.”
3. 3 observations regarding style, delivery, structure, or other storytelling elements
she understood only certain things and believed that doing practical things can help make the world a better place, she wants to help make people more aware and help created a humane center for all animals.
4. your attitude in relation to the speaker’s
i love how she helped animals feel safe and relaxed during their travels.

1. author/speaker
peter godfrin
2. crux or “thesis” of statement
i believe the ultimate sacrifice is to give life for the safety of our nature.
3. 3 observations regarding style, delivery, structure, or other storytelling elements
he has known loss, he watched people die in front of his and had to realize that death is always around in war, and he realized that he didn’t have the emotional training to deal with a death of a soldier under his command.
4. your attitude in relation to the speaker’s
he has had the privilege of working with amazing people who lost their lives for our country and realized the sacrifices people made. i love that he wears the bracelet for a soldier he lost in his command.

Cody O'Brien said...

Speaker- John McCain
Thesis- Believe in honor, faith, and service no matter the circumstances.
Structure- Tells story on his honor then follows with a story involving the faith he had as a PoW in Vietnam, and his dedication to the service.
Relation to speaker- Very humble and honorable

Speaker- Joel Boutin
Thesis- Having less is more
Structure- Talks about his start at life back in the US from his return of Peace Corps to be “plastic” and phony. Delivers a great feel to the reader of his enjoyable simplistic life.
Relation to speaker- Great listen about how having less can be more valuable than more.

Speaker- Alan Rabinowitz
Thesis- Stuttering is not a disability; people cannot see eye to eye with people that stutter
Structure- Strong delivery of his childhood growing up in school dealing with stuttering. Humans cannot accept him but his pets could let him speak whenever and however he wanted.
Relation to speaker- Still to this day some people believe stuttering is a disability and view people with it very poorly.

Ryan brown said...

1. Alan Rabinowitz "man and beast "

2. How to overcome obstacles that you cannot prevent from being in your way

3. Changed his tone a lot, excited to serious to sad, made the listen feel like they were there with him, Made the listeners laugh as well even though his story wasnt about being funny

4. He overcame his challenges with his speaking to become a successful scientist

5. 12

kgallahue journalism blog said...

1. Author/speaker
A:Man and Beast Alan Robinowitz

2. Crux or thesis statement
B: That he was removed from society due to having a disability growing up.
3. 3 Observations regarding style, structure or other storytelling elements

A: He could talk to animals normally B: Nobody understands how to help him out other than remove him from people C: That his parents sent him away to a school to help him get to control his stutter.

4. His Attitude towards life is being grateful. Also he just tries so hard to control his stutter . That this life changed forever after what his father did for him when he got send away to a place to control his stutter. How he went on trips and explored the world and be independent for once. Was going to chase cougars and captured them but this was his goal to do this. There were things in the way of him but he wanted to overcome his struggles and be happy. I found this story inspirational to know people are different and can do whatever they want with a little hard work.

5 I would give this story a 10 because his man was so brave and had so much courage to do what he did and overcome the struggle that he had to face in his younger years.

richhieeee said...

1. speaker and title Alan Rabinowitz "man of the beast"

2. theme of the story How to overcome his early struggles early in life to then learn from.

3. 3 observations regarding style, delivery, structure, or other storytelling elements He was very casual and would laugh a lot because he was referring to his past. His tone would change a lot when it came to emphasizing different parts.

4. your attitude in relation to the speaker’s story
I thought it was a cool story overcoming huge goals to become successful.
5. a score (based on our rubric) 13

Kelsie Brady said...

“Man and Beast”
The speaker of the story is a man who grew up with a stutter and had to learn to cope; Alan Rabinowitz.
The crux is that he grew up with a severe stutter and had to learn how to cope and learn how to not let the people around him stop him from speaking more fluently.
He flows through topics and moves along his story very smoothly and uses his words to express his emotions more prominently.
I think that the story is very heart wrenching. He tells a story about how sad and miserable he was as a child, and how no one accepted him. He tells about how much work it took for him to become a fluent speaker, and after 20 years he could finally express all of the words that he couldn’t speak through words. Towards the end of the story, he tells more about how exciting life his became, and how he finally became comfortable doing something.

Cameron Lowre said...

1. Thom Beers-Thom Beers
2. The Life of what you have done and whether it was worth it "Emmy award winner dies"
3. The good shifts from serious tones to uplifting comedic moments and even in some moments are serious such as the section of the heart attack
4. I believe that he is a very honest man who was able to honor the member of deadliest catch

John Weeks said...

1. speaker and title
Alan Raowitz Man and Beast
2. theme of the story
theme is to overcome struggles early in life and then learn from those struggles.
3. 3 observations regarding style, delivery, structure, or other storytelling elements
The guy was really casual.. laugh to his past and story... tone changed a lot often with elements of the story that was important.
4. your attitude in relation to the speaker’s story
I thought it was a pretty interesting story. He was in a way inspiring.

5. a score (based on our rubric) A

kgallahue journalism blog said...

1.Author/speaker
A: Chrissy Brown

2. Crux of the thesis statement
A:To want to be cool and that she wasn't going to be nerd anymore.11 year old girl just wanted to be accepted.

3. Observations and styles structure or other story telling elements
A:Halloween I was Mozart B: Had thick round coke bottle eye glasses C:Got hard contacts and my mom told me I couldn't loose them or I will have to pay 50 dollars D: Six months later she lost the contact getting of the bus as a dust of wind came as the bus drove away. She didn't tell her mom till she was 30 years old.

4. Her Attitude is that she was so scared to tell her mom because she didn't know how she would react. Because her main goal was to fit in and be cool and for the first time she felt that way.
5. I give this story a 7 because it was so funny.

Dean Nieuwkoop said...

Statements

Elvia Botista
Thesis: bad things that happen can bring out even better qualities
This story is all grieving and coming back from, it's got a comforting tone
I like this statement i think it's very true


Stories

Matthew dicks - stung
The theme is kind of sad yet portrays the idea that it is a part of life
This guy does a good job of making you feel sad, and he depicts it in a great detail by detail manner. In relation to the story my attitude is serious because this story has a meaning that is important.
Alan Rabinowitz - Man and Beast

This story is one that shows a true struggle of uprising since it is of a guy that overcomes an inability to speak. The overall theme of the whole stories is subtle and depicted colorfully. Even though it is a sad story at first that is what enables it to have genuine meaning. My attitude towards it is reasonable since it follows a somewhat cliche plot of struggle, the actual details seem very legit.

Thom Beers - Shot through the heart
About his work through his young adulthood and then his ungrateful event of a heart attack the speaker shows the crowd that he has what it takes to overcome even though he is scared. Its a simple story of having the will to live.


Dean N

Dean said...

Statements

Elvia Botista
Thesis: bad things that happen can bring out even better qualities
This story is all grieving and coming back from, it's got a comforting tone
I like this statement i think it's very true


Stories

Matthew dicks - stung
The theme is kind of sad yet portrays the idea that it is a part of life
This guy does a good job of making you feel sad, and he depicts it in a great detail by detail manner. In relation to the story my attitude is serious because this story has a meaning that is important.
Alan Rabinowitz - Man and Beast

This story is one that shows a true struggle of uprising since it is of a guy that overcomes an inability to speak. The overall theme of the whole stories is subtle and depicted colorfully. Even though it is a sad story at first that is what enables it to have genuine meaning. My attitude towards it is reasonable since it follows a somewhat cliche plot of struggle, the actual details seem very legit.

Thom Beers - Shot through the heart
About his work through his young adulthood and then his ungrateful event of a heart attack the speaker shows the crowd that he has what it takes to overcome even though he is scared. Its a simple story of having the will to live.


Maddie Murphy said...

1. Alan Rabinowitz "Man and Beast".
2. Reflecting of a boy and animals being alike.
3. He describe everything really good, as if you were there are the little boy. He was casual while speaking.
4. I feel like I was there watching the boy looking at the animals.
5. score-13

colin mello said...

1. speaker and title
A. Alan Rabinowitz " Man and Beast
B. Thom Beers "Shot Through the Heart"
C. Melissa Rodriguez "A family of My own"
2. theme of the story
A. everyone needs someone to talk to
B:cherish everything because it could all end soon
C.
3. 3 observations regarding style, delivery, structure, or other storytelling elements
A. He uses a solemn tone, he uses good transitions
B. he uses a humorous tone and really knows how to speak well
4. your attitude in relation to the speaker’s story
A.I think he is a very persistent man
B. he seems really proud of his experiences
C.
5. a score (based on our rubric)
A.14
B. 13
C.

Ryan brown said...

1. Thom Beers- Shot through the heart

2. The life experiences of Thom and how he lives a crazy life and has almost died a lot

3. Sometimes he would be using a funny tone, then he would go to a more serious tone, Also made fun of him self which is a good technique to use to make the listener be into the story

4. i liked the story it made me laugh and i like how he made fun of himself

5. 14

John Weeks said...

1. speaker and title
Thom Beers.. Short through the heart
2. theme of the story
Looking back at the past and reflecting.
3. 3 observations regarding style, delivery, structure, or other storytelling elements
shifts from serious notes makes it sound funny. But also has serious moments
4. your attitude in relation to the speaker’s story
i thought it was really funny.
5. a score (based on our rubric)
A

Jake Burgess said...

This I Believe
Ellen
Regardless of gangs everyone deserves flowers on their grave and to be remembered
While about gangs it wasn't /about/ gangs, flowers transcend gang colors
Sad. It was sad all the way through

John Mccain
Hope can be delivered through silence
His time in Vietnam, the cross drawn in the dirt,
It gave me faith

Fran Frieson
Doing your best does not mean being the best
She was bad at math and her teacher helped, he encouraged her to be her best
It made me want to do my best.

Sabrina Dabunk
Talk to strangers, you can learn
She meets an old man named don and she is his waiter and becomes like a daughter to him
I thought it was a cute story

Moth
Alan Rabinowitz “Man and Beast”
Animals are therapeutic
Relating himself to animals, his parents trying to fix him, and his voice
I can feel the pain in his voice.
15/ A

Thom Beers “Shot Through the Heart”
Heart attacks will get ya
Fast paced action, humor, and the list of bad things
I think he is a very lucky guy
13/ B

Melissa Rodriguez “Family of My Own”
Life is beautiful.
Her voice feels the story, you hear the love,
Poor baby...
15/ A

Kasara Maloney said...

Connie Mudenda- A mother can't wait

Theme: Hiv test results for pregnant women.

Delivery: She seems confident telling the story, shares her thoughts bluntly, and is sure to exemplify the emotional impact the events that took place had on her and how she was influenced to be more empathetic in her occupation.

Opinion: I could never do her job, being an HIV counselor seems like a devastating job.

Rating: 1-10 6 because I wasn't very interested in the story, but it was impactful.


James Foster- Taken for a ride

Theme: Stolen Car

Opinion: He delivered the story well and was very optimistic even though the story was rather grim. He made the audience laugh and told the story humorously, poking fun at himself to make it entertaining.

Rating: 1-10 9/10 It was very interesting and funny.

Matthew Dicks-Stung

Theme: Bee sting

Delivery: He delivers the story at a fast pace and quickly moves from almost comical to suspenseful.

opinion:It was a good story.

Rating: 10/10 Very intersting good delivery.