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Friday, December 21, 2007
Writing and Visual Imagination: 12-21
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Maddie D. Characterization: “He had gorgeous blue eyes, dark hair, tall and muscular.” Maddie D. Conflict: “… he saw me walking past the house with another man.” Sam V. Ambiguity: “He is my soul, my heart, and my life… he is my pain, my suffering, and my drug.” Sam V. Motif: “He lies… he is my pain.” Andrea G. Mood: “… four years old when she was diagnosed with leukemia.” Andrea G. Dialogue: “Why aren’t I beautiful?” “You are the most beautiful girl I have ever seen.” Kayla H. Characterization: “She was tall, with ebony hair wrapped in an elegant bun, fair skin and piercing blue eyes…” Kayla H. Setting: “54th, please(NY)… Geller and Associates.”
Kate B- Imagery- the elevator came to a stop and Sheldon excited and turned right down the empty, dark corridor
Jess Q-Imagery- I would never forget her hair, the color of fresh chestnuts skin as soft as porcelain and the face of an angle.
Olivia L-Onomatopoeia- Ring, Ring, Ring.
Emily M- Imagery- the Sky a thick matted cloak shielded the sun light from the rest of the world.
Aliya L-Onomatopoeia- Bang. Mommy hits the Floor.
Kate B-Onomatopoeia- Screeeeeechh
Imagery- Andrea G- With out thinking twice, she hurled the mascara out the window and kept her steady foot on the gas petal until she reached vogue.
Darren M- Imagery- the Molotov cocktail exploded against the wall of the police headquarters spreading intense orange flames quickly across the ancient structure.
Chris J- imagery- Pushing his floor number and the close door button as hard as he could, he heard a female voice calling for him to hold the elevator. He panicked, knowing that with every passing minute, he was later and later.
Kate B- Imagery- the elevator came to a stop and Sheldon excited and turned right down the empty, dark corridor
Jess Q-Imagery- I would never forget her hair, the color of fresh chestnuts skin as soft as porcelain and the face of an angle.
Olivia L-Onomatopoeia- Ring, Ring, Ring.
Emily M- Imagery- the Sky a thick matted cloak shielded the sun light from the rest of the world.
Aliya L-Onomatopoeia- Bang. Mommy hits the Floor.
Kate B-Onomatopoeia- Screeeeeechh
Imagery- Andrea G- With out thinking twice, she hurled the mascara out the window and kept her steady foot on the gas petal until she reached vogue.
Darren M- Imagery- the Molotov cocktail exploded against the wall of the police headquarters spreading intense orange flames quickly across the ancient structure.
Kayla H- imagery- Pushing his floor number and the close door button as hard as he could, he heard a female voice calling for him to hold the elevator. He panicked, knowing that with every passing minute, he was later and later.
Cameron Morton’s narrative “Welcome to the World” showed great imagery. His use of realistic instances and props served as great tools to create this imagery. Plus, I felt as if his motif of birth was quite quant considering the main character Damien Hirst, is considered a morbid expressionist. Cameron gave me insight to Damien’s feelings, and I thought the symbol of birth was a great tool for igniting an emotional response.
Aliya Little’s narrative “Good Bye” was painful, yet inspirational. Her recurring motif of pain and sufferance is always touching in her works, as it is in this particular one. There is an element of depression within her narrative, brought on by the abusive father and the lack of love from both parents. There was a dark imagery painted by Aliya because of the “pool of blood.”
Jess Q’s narrative (with the ballerina slumping over a chair) was quite touching. There was a sweet theme which deals with the concept that someone else’s passions are not always what you want. I enjoyed the sweet ending with the mother accepting the daughter for what she wants to do in life. This is something that will be didactic for all parents because it teaches them that their expectations for their children are not always what is meant to be.
1. Jess Q’s Leg Warmers, contains onomatopoeia, in the sounds of the gunshots, “Bang!”. 2. Laura R’s narrative contains simile, “You will be as live as a rock”. 3. Cam M’s Remembrance, contains personification and imagery, “Days of sadness poured out of my eyes all at once”. 4. Emily M’s The Bank Robbery, contains onomatopoeia, “Cling, clang, twing, pitter patter”. 5. Chris J’s Man’s Best Friend, contains irony, “It was a dog that took my vision and now it is a dog that is my vision”. 6. Aliya L’s Goodbye, contains personification, “I watched as the lonely tear that had been sitting on my cheek had fell”. 7. Darren M’s Viva, contains irony, when a new leader promising change executes an old dictator, “The old dictatorship would seem almost humane compared to his”. 8. Olivia L’s Sick, contains flashback, “I can remember when this all began to take over my life…”.
1. Cameron’s A Strange Discovery had an aphorism for the last line. “…when I asked him why he would do such a thing he simply said ‘because I’m Lucien Freud.’” 2. Olivia’s The Ride of my Life had good examples of imagery. “…the sun is setting over the horizon of what looks like a sherbet massacre.” 3. Kate’s What Would You do for Money displayed very concise diction. “…a strange phone call, a meeting late at night in a deserted park, an offer no one could refuse.” 4. Lindsay’s The Big Game changed point of view nicely. The first paragraph was “Today my brother was going to get his Black Belt in Karate.” And the second paragraph transitions to “…I knew that my parents and sister would be so proud of me.” 5. Laura’s narrative was really touching and the emotional impact was strong. “I have tried telling my family this numerous times but every time I start to, I stop because I can’t stand the hurt expressions I know I would see on their faces.” 6. Emily’s The Bank Robbery was a very suspenseful story. You did not know whether or not the elves would get caught. “If we smash the cave then the kid’ll know that something (or someone) stole his money.”
The piece “Candy” by Darren Martins uses symbolism to make his narrative highly effective. Dmart’s character of the little boy symbolizes death of innocence people and soldiers of the Vietnam War.
“Its Pink” by Kayla H offers well constructed characterization. From the opening paragraph the reader becomes hooked on the fact that the narrator is pregnant. Kayla uses this topic and relates it through the character about the hardships of teen pregnancy.
Kate Baird’s piece “Her only Companion was her Money” offers major importance in the climax. During the rising action the reader is left in suspense over what exactly was the cause of the husband’s murder. The last line draws the connection to the reader.
Laura Ready uses different point of views in her story to make her narrative effective. I also found the humor used at the end to play a vital role in the story as well.
Andrea Giglio offers inter character conflict that plays an important role in her narrative. The conflict that follows the narrator connects the reader to the rest of the narrative.
“Goodbye” by Aliya expresses the theme of pain. The character feels pain due to the fact that her parents did not love her. The fact that her parents did not love her would eventually lead her to kill her parents.
“Time Smoking a Picture” by Laura S offers good diction that is used throughout the piece.
“The Beauty of Love” shows major imagery. As Caroline is walking down the streets of New York, depicting the crowd of soldiers, to the way she is looking down at her feet as she walks.
“The Way I am” by Daniel M shows irony within the character of Jake and his accident. Jake states that he believes in God and that he can communicate with him. The car accident is ironic because he felt God was protecting him.
Kate Baird- A banjo, some loose change, and a tear (The banjo lesson, Henry O. tanner, Oil on Canvas, 1893) “Then his mood changes real quick, like a rabbit that knows its about to be shot.” (Simile)
Lauren Southworth- Time smoking a picture It was very ironic. “Bernard took deep breaths to have cold air rush into his lungs and make him feel refreshed.”
Olivia Lavendier- Sick “My hair is a rat’s nest from yet another lost night of sleep.” (Metaphor)
Jessica Quintanilha- Ballerina (Dance) The conflict of this story was that a girl didn’t want to be a ballerina but her mom her mom was pushing her to be one.
Laura Ready- Innocence- mother and Abby “Sitting on the ground at the mouth of her closet, attentively at work...” (Simile)
Andrea Giglio- The beauty of love (beauty) “As the sun slowly began to rise, it illuminated the city sidewalks as the dew evaporated from the grass.” (Metaphor)
Aliya N. Little- Pain “Because I walk alone, I am just another clone.” (Metaphor)
Cameron Morton- Welcome to the world “Ashes fall into in the sterile, linoleum floor as he flicks his slowly burning cigarette” (Imagery)
Wimp No More: This narrative in particular is striking because of the excellent use of characterization. We get a great look into the mind of Tim, the narrator of the story, and why he decides to be so brave that fateful night. Two Worlds, One Faith: The opposing viewpoints in this story make for a good look at both sides of the issue of religion. My Soul, My Heart: This story uses two great rhetorical devices: anaphora and asyndeton. Pain: The characterization of the main character does a lot to bring out the reasons for the anguish that she feels. A Banjo, Some Loose Change, and a Tear: I think the best thing about this story is the dialogue, both inner dialogue from the narrator and outer dialogue between him and Henry. Man’s Best Friend: The irony in this story makes for a great ending, and an interesting overall moral message. It’s Pink: There are some very strong views expressed here, and the changing viewpoint from the pregnant teen to the narrator shows both sides of them. Paradise: The personification of the duck really brings the story to life.
The voice is changing throughout Danielle’s narrative. In the beginning, the voice is skeptical and depressed, “I see people slowly dieing as I say hi to them.” As the story progresses the voice becomes happy and hopeful, “They have helped us so much and all I want to say to them is thank you.”
Darren uses a lot of imagery in his writing. One example is when he says, “The Molotov cocktail exploded against the wall of the police headquarters, spreading intense orange flames quickly across the ancient structure.”
Kayla’s point of view is from a sixteen year old girl who just found out that she was pregnant. “I’m going to have a baby. I’m going to have a baby. I’m going to have a baby.”
Theme- "But even if she is said to be 'pretty' by someone else is means nothing unless she agrees with them." -Andrea G Mood-I can still smell you. That sweaty musk; that I couldn't stand before. I wish I had. Everything is the way is was that nigh; the dishes in the are in the sink with the pizza and ketchup still stuck on them. It's like you never left." -Alya L. Tone-"My name is Nikki and I an different and I like it that way." -Danielle M. Foreshadowning-"Competition and fierce, envious eyes nonchalantly followed the thin, silouetting shadows of the rich and famous." -Murder at Marina Mansion. Rhyme- "Up and down slow and fast our hearts were beating till the pass." -Lindsey B Characterization-"Bernard took deep breaths to have the cold aire fil lhis lungs and make him feel refreshed." Laurn S --Maddie Davern
“The Voice” by CJ Jordan plunges the reader right in the middle of the conflict. The author piques interest with its mysterious first character, a disembodied voice. The fact that the voice seems to have characteristics of its own shows a good handle on characterization and personification.
Danielle M.’s “The Way I Am” employs good use of dialogue to establish the relationships and clashes between its characters. It also integrates a system of beliefs, in an effort to make this story unique.
“Viva!” by Darren M., demonstrates a wonderful use of imagery, especially in it opening paragraph: “Christoph and his comrades cheered in triumph as the blaze engulfed the building.” The author’s developed vocabulary only adds to its descriptiveness.
Lauren S.’s “Double Portrait of the Artist in Time” is heartbreaking and beautiful in its depiction of a mother's dying wishes. The author innovatively uses dual points of view, and creatively writes in a diary style.
Lindsay B.’s race narrative is short and to the point, capturing a moment in time. The lack of dialogue works in her favor, establishing the characters’ internal connection.
Sam V.’s narrative uses many rhetorical devices to strengthen the plot. The utilization of anaphora, asyndeton, repetition, and rhetorical questions adds immensely to emphasize the internal thoughts of the narrator. This is demonstrated best in the sentences that use, "my...my...my."
L.South- flashback of her child Lilly taking her first baby steps and how it made a climax point in her life. She felt how she was "such a big deal to her." Concept: Time
K.Baird- the style she used switched the voice by using a diary entry. "She grabbed the worn-out diary, opened it randomely, and began to read aloud.." Concept: Companionship :)
J.Quintinella- she used a parable between the mother and daughter about her love for dance and how she should do what makes her happy. Concept: Dance
C.Morton- used good imagery throughout his narrative. "I walk over and am introduced to my wrinkly-faced nephew Connor, who is squirming around in his mother's arms like a little worm." Concept: Birth!
L.Ready- Used a simile.."Sitting on the ground at the mouth of her closet, attentively at work." Concept: (Child) Innocence
A.Giglio- uses a metaphor in the quote: "As the sun slowly began to rise it illuminated the city sideways as the dew evaporated from the grass." Concept: The Beauty of Love
Katie by Aliya Little •Personification- “The silence kind of cuts me to no return.”
The Beauty of Love by Andrea Giglio •Mood- heart broken, lost, pain…”Erik couldn’t be dead that’s not possible. She didn’t know what to do; she simply broke down, crying hysterically on the floor of the café.”
The Big Game by Lindsay •Theme- anything is possible…”do not hold back, and accomplish your goals, we can all do it!”
Leg Warmers by Jess Q. •Onomatopoeia- “Bang!”
Her Only Companion Was Her Money by Kate B. •Onomatopoeia- “SCREEEECHH!”
The Ride of My Life by Olivia •Imagery- “Fastening my seatbelt I hear the click of a new chapter to my career in this fachion industry.”
Viva! By Darren Martins •Imagery- “The Molotov cocktail exploded against the wall of the police headquarters, spreading intense orange flames quickly across the ancient structure.
Andrea G.-imagery-"She was bone thin now, from dieting to fit into her new clothes, with brown hair and brown eyes."
Aliya L.-flashback-"I'll never forget theat night, I was lying in my bed and I heard a crash."
Darren M.-imagery-"...chunks of skull and gore splattering the sidewalk..."
Olivia L.-metaphor-"My hair is a rat's nest"
Maddie D.-flashback-"One sunny afternoon, I was walking to the supermarket to pick up a few things that I needed in my ramshackle, little apartment when I ran into Enrique"
16 comments:
Maddie D. Characterization: “He had gorgeous blue eyes, dark hair, tall and muscular.”
Maddie D. Conflict: “… he saw me walking past the house with another man.”
Sam V. Ambiguity: “He is my soul, my heart, and my life… he is my pain, my suffering, and my drug.”
Sam V. Motif: “He lies… he is my pain.”
Andrea G. Mood: “… four years old when she was diagnosed with leukemia.”
Andrea G. Dialogue: “Why aren’t I beautiful?” “You are the most beautiful girl I have ever seen.”
Kayla H. Characterization: “She was tall, with ebony hair wrapped in an elegant bun, fair skin and piercing blue eyes…”
Kayla H. Setting: “54th, please(NY)… Geller and Associates.”
Danielle M. per: A
Kate B- Imagery- the elevator came to a stop and Sheldon excited and turned right down the empty, dark corridor
Jess Q-Imagery- I would never forget her hair, the color of fresh chestnuts skin as soft as porcelain and the face of an angle.
Olivia L-Onomatopoeia- Ring, Ring, Ring.
Emily M- Imagery- the Sky a thick matted cloak shielded the sun light from the rest of the world.
Aliya L-Onomatopoeia- Bang. Mommy hits the Floor.
Kate B-Onomatopoeia- Screeeeeechh
Imagery- Andrea G- With out thinking twice, she hurled the mascara out the window and kept her steady foot on the gas petal until she reached vogue.
Darren M- Imagery- the Molotov cocktail exploded against the wall of the police headquarters spreading intense orange flames quickly across the ancient structure.
Chris J- imagery- Pushing his floor number and the close door button as hard as he could, he heard a female voice calling for him to hold the elevator. He panicked, knowing that with every passing minute, he was later and later.
Chris Lenihan
Kate B- Imagery- the elevator came to a stop and Sheldon excited and turned right down the empty, dark corridor
Jess Q-Imagery- I would never forget her hair, the color of fresh chestnuts skin as soft as porcelain and the face of an angle.
Olivia L-Onomatopoeia- Ring, Ring, Ring.
Emily M- Imagery- the Sky a thick matted cloak shielded the sun light from the rest of the world.
Aliya L-Onomatopoeia- Bang. Mommy hits the Floor.
Kate B-Onomatopoeia- Screeeeeechh
Imagery- Andrea G- With out thinking twice, she hurled the mascara out the window and kept her steady foot on the gas petal until she reached vogue.
Darren M- Imagery- the Molotov cocktail exploded against the wall of the police headquarters spreading intense orange flames quickly across the ancient structure.
Kayla H- imagery- Pushing his floor number and the close door button as hard as he could, he heard a female voice calling for him to hold the elevator. He panicked, knowing that with every passing minute, he was later and later.
Chris Lenihan
Laura Ready
Irony
“ When mommy was lecturing me about the old man she told me to walk in someone else’s shoes… I was going to be doing a lot of walking.”
Emily Medeiros
Personification
“ And those soft breezes commencing the summer season never stir my emotions the way they use to.”
Maddie. D
Emotional Effect
“He grabbed my ankle and twisted it backward until I heard it crack.”
Lindsay Forman
Romance
“ Having him be there made her feel as if nothing else matters.”
The Freshman
Description
“ She rotated her body, so it was facing the direction of the voice that was calling for her.”
Kate Baird
Symbolism
Tuesdays= Symbolizes happiness in the end
“I used to hate Tuesdays.”
Laura Ready
Irony
“Nobody seems to take the time to admire the flowers in the park, or even tell somebody else they are appreciated.”
Aliya N. Little
Emily Medeiros
Cameron Morton’s narrative “Welcome to the World” showed great imagery. His use of realistic instances and props served as great tools to create this imagery. Plus, I felt as if his motif of birth was quite quant considering the main character Damien Hirst, is considered a morbid expressionist. Cameron gave me insight to Damien’s feelings, and I thought the symbol of birth was a great tool for igniting an emotional response.
Aliya Little’s narrative “Good Bye” was painful, yet inspirational. Her recurring motif of pain and sufferance is always touching in her works, as it is in this particular one. There is an element of depression within her narrative, brought on by the abusive father and the lack of love from both parents. There was a dark imagery painted by Aliya because of the “pool of blood.”
Jess Q’s narrative (with the ballerina slumping over a chair) was quite touching. There was a sweet theme which deals with the concept that someone else’s passions are not always what you want. I enjoyed the sweet ending with the mother accepting the daughter for what she wants to do in life. This is something that will be didactic for all parents because it teaches them that their expectations for their children are not always what is meant to be.
1. Jess Q’s Leg Warmers, contains onomatopoeia, in the sounds of the gunshots, “Bang!”.
2. Laura R’s narrative contains simile, “You will be as live as a rock”.
3. Cam M’s Remembrance, contains personification and imagery, “Days of sadness poured out of my eyes all at once”.
4. Emily M’s The Bank Robbery, contains onomatopoeia, “Cling, clang, twing, pitter patter”.
5. Chris J’s Man’s Best Friend, contains irony, “It was a dog that took my vision and now it is a dog that is my vision”.
6. Aliya L’s Goodbye, contains personification, “I watched as the lonely tear that had been sitting on my cheek had fell”.
7. Darren M’s Viva, contains irony, when a new leader promising change executes an old dictator, “The old dictatorship would seem almost humane compared to his”.
8. Olivia L’s Sick, contains flashback, “I can remember when this all began to take over my life…”.
- Kate Baird
1. Cameron’s A Strange Discovery had an aphorism for the last line. “…when I asked him why he would do such a thing he simply said ‘because I’m Lucien Freud.’”
2. Olivia’s The Ride of my Life had good examples of imagery. “…the sun is setting over the horizon of what looks like a sherbet massacre.”
3. Kate’s What Would You do for Money displayed very concise diction. “…a strange phone call, a meeting late at night in a deserted park, an offer no one could refuse.”
4. Lindsay’s The Big Game changed point of view nicely. The first paragraph was “Today my brother was going to get his Black Belt in Karate.” And the second paragraph transitions to “…I knew that my parents and sister would be so proud of me.”
5. Laura’s narrative was really touching and the emotional impact was strong. “I have tried telling my family this numerous times but every time I start to, I stop because I can’t stand the hurt expressions I know I would see on their faces.”
6. Emily’s The Bank Robbery was a very suspenseful story. You did not know whether or not the elves would get caught. “If we smash the cave then the kid’ll know that something (or someone) stole his money.”
Lauren Southworth
The piece “Candy” by Darren Martins uses symbolism to make his narrative highly effective. Dmart’s character of the little boy symbolizes death of innocence people and soldiers of the Vietnam War.
“Its Pink” by Kayla H offers well constructed characterization. From the opening paragraph the reader becomes hooked on the fact that the narrator is pregnant. Kayla uses this topic and relates it through the character about the hardships of teen pregnancy.
Kate Baird’s piece “Her only Companion was her Money” offers major importance in the climax. During the rising action the reader is left in suspense over what exactly was the cause of the husband’s murder. The last line draws the connection to the reader.
Laura Ready uses different point of views in her story to make her narrative effective. I also found the humor used at the end to play a vital role in the story as well.
Andrea Giglio offers inter character conflict that plays an important role in her narrative. The conflict that follows the narrator connects the reader to the rest of the narrative.
“Goodbye” by Aliya expresses the theme of pain. The character feels pain due to the fact that her parents did not love her. The fact that her parents did not love her would eventually lead her to kill her parents.
“Time Smoking a Picture” by Laura S offers good diction that is used throughout the piece.
“The Beauty of Love” shows major imagery. As Caroline is walking down the streets of New York, depicting the crowd of soldiers, to the way she is looking down at her feet as she walks.
“The Way I am” by Daniel M shows irony within the character of Jake and his accident. Jake states that he believes in God and that he can communicate with him. The car accident is ironic because he felt God was protecting him.
Chris Jordan
A block
Kate Baird- A banjo, some loose change, and a tear (The banjo lesson, Henry O. tanner, Oil on Canvas, 1893)
“Then his mood changes real quick, like a rabbit that knows its about to be shot.” (Simile)
Lauren Southworth- Time smoking a picture
It was very ironic. “Bernard took deep breaths to have cold air rush into his lungs and make him feel refreshed.”
Olivia Lavendier- Sick
“My hair is a rat’s nest from yet another lost night of sleep.” (Metaphor)
Jessica Quintanilha- Ballerina (Dance)
The conflict of this story was that a girl didn’t want to be a ballerina but her mom her mom was pushing her to be one.
Laura Ready- Innocence- mother and Abby
“Sitting on the ground at the mouth of her closet, attentively at work...” (Simile)
Andrea Giglio- The beauty of love (beauty)
“As the sun slowly began to rise, it illuminated the city sidewalks as the dew evaporated from the grass.” (Metaphor)
Aliya N. Little- Pain
“Because I walk alone, I am just another clone.” (Metaphor)
Cameron Morton- Welcome to the world
“Ashes fall into in the sterile, linoleum floor as he flicks his slowly burning cigarette”
(Imagery)
-lindsay forman
Wimp No More: This narrative in particular is striking because of the excellent use of characterization. We get a great look into the mind of Tim, the narrator of the story, and why he decides to be so brave that fateful night.
Two Worlds, One Faith: The opposing viewpoints in this story make for a good look at both sides of the issue of religion.
My Soul, My Heart: This story uses two great rhetorical devices: anaphora and asyndeton.
Pain: The characterization of the main character does a lot to bring out the reasons for the anguish that she feels.
A Banjo, Some Loose Change, and a Tear: I think the best thing about this story is the dialogue, both inner dialogue from the narrator and outer dialogue between him and Henry.
Man’s Best Friend: The irony in this story makes for a great ending, and an interesting overall moral message.
It’s Pink: There are some very strong views expressed here, and the changing viewpoint from the pregnant teen to the narrator shows both sides of them.
Paradise: The personification of the duck really brings the story to life.
-Darren Martins per. A
The voice is changing throughout Danielle’s narrative. In the beginning, the voice is skeptical and depressed, “I see people slowly dieing as I say hi to them.” As the story progresses the voice becomes happy and hopeful, “They have helped us so much and all I want to say to them is thank you.”
Darren uses a lot of imagery in his writing. One example is when he says, “The Molotov cocktail exploded against the wall of the police headquarters, spreading intense orange flames quickly across the ancient structure.”
Kayla’s point of view is from a sixteen year old girl who just found out that she was pregnant. “I’m going to have a baby. I’m going to have a baby. I’m going to have a baby.”
Sam Varney
Theme- "But even if she is said to be 'pretty' by someone else is means nothing unless she agrees with them."
-Andrea G
Mood-I can still smell you. That sweaty musk; that I couldn't stand before. I wish I had. Everything is the way is was that nigh; the dishes in the are in the sink with the pizza and ketchup still stuck on them. It's like you never left."
-Alya L.
Tone-"My name is Nikki and I an different and I like it that way."
-Danielle M.
Foreshadowning-"Competition and fierce, envious eyes nonchalantly followed the thin, silouetting shadows of the rich and famous."
-Murder at Marina Mansion.
Rhyme- "Up and down slow and fast our hearts were beating till the pass."
-Lindsey B
Characterization-"Bernard took deep breaths to have the cold aire fil lhis lungs and make him feel refreshed."
Laurn S
--Maddie Davern
“The Voice” by CJ Jordan plunges the reader right in the middle of the conflict. The author piques interest with its mysterious first character, a disembodied voice. The fact that the voice seems to have characteristics of its own shows a good handle on characterization and personification.
Danielle M.’s “The Way I Am” employs good use of dialogue to establish the relationships and clashes between its characters. It also integrates a system of beliefs, in an effort to make this story unique.
“Viva!” by Darren M., demonstrates a wonderful use of imagery, especially in it opening paragraph: “Christoph and his comrades cheered in triumph as the blaze engulfed the building.” The author’s developed vocabulary only adds to its descriptiveness.
Lauren S.’s “Double Portrait of the Artist in Time” is heartbreaking and beautiful in its depiction of a mother's dying wishes. The author innovatively uses dual points of view, and creatively writes in a diary style.
Lindsay B.’s race narrative is short and to the point, capturing a moment in time. The lack of dialogue works in her favor, establishing the characters’ internal connection.
Sam V.’s narrative uses many rhetorical devices to strengthen the plot. The utilization of anaphora, asyndeton, repetition, and rhetorical questions adds immensely to emphasize the internal thoughts of the narrator. This is demonstrated best in the sentences that use, "my...my...my."
L.South- flashback of her child Lilly taking her first baby steps and how it made a climax point in her life. She felt how she was "such a big deal to her."
Concept: Time
K.Baird- the style she used switched the voice by using a diary entry. "She grabbed the worn-out diary, opened it randomely, and began to read aloud.."
Concept: Companionship :)
J.Quintinella- she used a parable between the mother and daughter about her love for dance and how she should do what makes her happy.
Concept: Dance
C.Morton- used good imagery throughout his narrative. "I walk over and am introduced to my wrinkly-faced nephew Connor, who is squirming around in his mother's arms like a little worm."
Concept: Birth!
L.Ready- Used a simile.."Sitting on the ground at the mouth of her closet, attentively at work."
Concept: (Child) Innocence
A.Giglio- uses a metaphor in the quote: "As the sun slowly began to rise it illuminated the city sideways as the dew evaporated from the grass."
Concept: The Beauty of Love
:) Livy
Laura Ready....vis.imag. A
Katie by Aliya Little
•Personification- “The silence kind of cuts me to no return.”
The Beauty of Love by Andrea Giglio
•Mood- heart broken, lost, pain…”Erik couldn’t be dead that’s not possible. She didn’t know what to do; she simply broke down, crying hysterically on the floor of the café.”
The Big Game by Lindsay
•Theme- anything is possible…”do not hold back, and accomplish your goals, we can all do it!”
Leg Warmers by Jess Q.
•Onomatopoeia- “Bang!”
Her Only Companion Was Her Money by Kate B.
•Onomatopoeia- “SCREEEECHH!”
The Ride of My Life by Olivia
•Imagery- “Fastening my seatbelt I hear the click of a new chapter to my career in this fachion industry.”
Viva! By Darren Martins
•Imagery- “The Molotov cocktail exploded against the wall of the police headquarters, spreading intense orange flames quickly across the ancient structure.
Jess Quintanilha
Kate B.-onomatopeia-"SCREEEECHH"
Laura R.-imagery-"Ants and other insects crawl in-between the cracks of the ground, while trying to avoid the wads of various colored gum."
Emily M.-onomatopeia-"cling, clang, twing, pitter, patter"
Andrea G.-imagery-"She was bone thin now, from dieting to fit into her new clothes, with brown hair and brown eyes."
Aliya L.-flashback-"I'll never forget theat night, I was lying in my bed and I heard a crash."
Darren M.-imagery-"...chunks of skull and gore splattering the sidewalk..."
Olivia L.-metaphor-"My hair is a rat's nest"
Maddie D.-flashback-"One sunny afternoon, I was walking to the supermarket to pick up a few things that I needed in my ramshackle, little apartment when I ran into Enrique"
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