Reflect on the strengths and weaknesses of your thesis based on the feedback you have received. Which components were successful? Which components do you need to focus on in the future? After reflecting on these questions, please revise your thesis and include it in your comment here. Be sure to include your name.
Thursday, October 2, 2014
F Block Seniors: "Lost" Thesis Reflections
Reflect on the strengths and weaknesses of your thesis based on the feedback you have received. Which components were successful? Which components do you need to focus on in the future? After reflecting on these questions, please revise your thesis and include it in your comment here. Be sure to include your name.
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Describing the feeling of confusion in "Lost", David Wagoner uses earthy imagery, natural personification, and alive metaphors to convey the feeling that "If you leave it, you may come back again, staying there."
-Madison Duross
Some strengths in my thesis were my universal idea and my devices and modifiers. Something I need to work on is the verbs going into my devices. I also need to work on the introductory phrases.
Revised thesis: Trying to find himself in "Lost", David Wagner incorporates profound personification, displays naturalistic imagery, and expresses an enlightening tone to convey the message that if you're ever lost, just "stand still" and "let it find you."
Catherine Rafuse
My thesis had both weak and strong components to it. For starters, I accidentally wrote mood instead of tone for one of my devices. I also used "awkward paining" when I said "enlightening the intended target". It was worded weirdly and could've used revision. I picked my devices and activators nicely, and I used good vocabulary throughout the statement. My revised thesis is : Telling the subject to stay motivated and consistent in "Lost", David Wagoner portrays naturalistic imagery, unique symbolism, and conveys optimistic tone to show the importance of staying positive and not getting "Lost".
-Keenan Coffey
The components that were successful in my "Lost" thesis statement were strong modifiers, well thought-out devices, and a good quote to tie up the thesis statement. In the future i will need to double check that all punctuation is correct and recheck to make sure that all the devices that id chosen could be argued and explained.
-Mickayla Shepard
Alejandro Torres
Comparing actual to figurative isolation in "Lost", David Wagoner uses natural symbolism, specific comparison and repetitive personification to show us that though we may feel alone, we must "stand still" to find the forest or "let the forest find us"
Jordan D
Losing hope in "lost" David Wagnoer shows deep metaphor, earthy personification, and imagery of the forest to suggest that when we are lost in the forest we "must let it find"us.
Describing trying to find yourself mentally in "Lost". David Wagoner uses natural imagery, environmental personification and significant repetition to convey that you will always be able to find yourself even if you feel hopeless, while acknowledging that "You must let it find you."
-Benjamin Giarrusso
My introductory phrase had a grammar mistake. Yourself should be himself referring to Wagoner, the subject of the sentence. All but one of my verbs, modifying phrases and devices were good. Intricate should be changed to displays or presents. My universal idea was also good.
I need to focus more on the structure of my introductory phrase and I need to not confuse myself of the subject of the sentence.
Thesis: Trying to find himself in a forest of isolation in "lost", David Wagoner presents naturalistic imagery, incorporates profound personification, and describes an enlightening tone to persuade that you are never lost if you "stand still" and "let it find you."
Elliot Ariola
In The Poem "lost" David Waganer uses beautiful imagery, powerful metaphors and visable personification to get the reader to understand you can't just speed though life.
-Marlena Sage
Christopher LaPalme
The mistakes that brought my grade and thesis down are now corrected, after reading the thesis again you as the reader can understand what I was trying to commutate before and after the corrections. I am very choose at all exemplary but no one is perfect, I did the best I can in the time aloud.
Trying to reconnect with teachings of Nature in "Lost", David Wagoner uses naturel imagery, sensational symbolism and environmental per sonication to convey a sense of environmentalism while knowing that you must decide your own fate by understanding that "The forest knows where you are. You must let it find you"
In my thesis change alive metaphors to visible metaphors. I had many strong and weak parts to my thesis statement. Changing alive to visible will make more sense to the reader.
-Madison Duross
Reflect on the strengths and weaknesses of your thesis based on the feedback you have received. Which components were successful? Which components do you need to focus on in the future? After reflecting on these questions, please revise your thesis and include it in your comment here. Be sure to include your name.
My strengths of my thesis statement is identifying poetic devices and having a good universal idea. My weakness’ of my thesis statement is awkward paring and spelling mistakes. Trying to find himself in "Lost", David Wagoner uses rhythmic alliteration, naturalistic imagery and clear symbolism to convey to us that if you stand still, you will not be "surely lost."
Some of my weaknesses in my thesis statement are its lack in structure. I have revised it flipping my opening sentence making it flow better. A strength in my thesis statement was displaying good characteristics about David Wagoner.
When trying to find yourself in “lost” by David Wagoner uses nature to demonstrate clear symbolism, optimistic tone, and naturalistic personification. By slowing down and “letting it find you.”
Describing his mental status in the poem "Lost", David Wagner uses environmental personification, naturalistic imagery, and a placid tone to show us that if you're lost you can always be found, if "you are surely lost.Stand still. The forest knows where you are. You must let it find you."
-Cassandra Goyette
My strengths were the use of literary devices, and my universal statement, and something i could work on is my modifiers.
-Alexyis Dyckman
I kinda blew the game because i forgot to include the universal idea, oops, my opening was also rather mediocre.
In "lost" a poem by David Wagoner, he is able to disperse natural personification, unspoken symbolism,and directional imagery, leaving you feeling that "the forest knows Where you are".
My strengths and weaknesses of my thesis based on the feedback I have received is progressively improving. My three devices with modifiers were a little to revealing with information so I unveiled a bit less. Also I changed my universal Idea to a more simple one, If you ever become lost, "Where you are. You must let it find you".
Through the misplaced eyes of David Wagoner's "Lost" you experience the depiction of natural realism, the symbolism of the atmosphere, and the embodiment of being animate."Where you are. You must let it find you."
- Connor M
My strengths were in my universal idea and my modifiers but I made simple mistakes in punctuation and spelling. Finding himself in "lost", David Wagoner brings together natural imagery constant personification and revealing metaphor to help explain that when you are lost there's nothing you can do except "let" yourself "find you"
Kenzie stewart ended his thesis with "let" youself "find you"
My strengths were my universal idea. I need to work on my intro phases.
Nature is trying to show you the way i "Lost", David Wagoner uses naturalistic personification, earthy imagery, and optimistic tone to convey the fact that you are never lost if you if you just "Stand Still" and take in your surroundings.
Humbling the reader in "Lost" David Wagoner uses mystical theme, with a natural setting, and a stern tone too describe the strengths and weaknesses on finding oneself mentally.
There were both strengths and weaknesses in my thesis. A weak point in my thesis was my placement of the quote, it was just awkward and didn’t flow very well. I also found a better adjective to describe one of my devices. I also found a better quote that described my thesis in a more precise way.
Describing the road less traveled on in “Lost”, David Wagoner uses earthy imagery, natural personification and blatant metaphors to ensure the reader that he or she can find peace in a place “called here.”
My strengths were universal idea and thesis speaking and I need to work on my sentence structure.
Composing a brief depiction of the forest in "Lost" David Wagoner uses natural symbolism, imagery and personification to express his respect to life. Wherever you are, cherish present and be respected to life. Nobody has the same life, we all have to be strong to success ed in life.
-Jade Qin
Describing the forest In the poem “Lost” David Wagoner uses profound symbolism , guiding metaphor and deliberate repetition to reveal that life will always guide you. “you must let it find you.”
- Melissa Potvin
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